使用简洁的词来代替冗长累赘的短语
例(10):wordy: in the sense of his speech he talked on the question of securities.
concise: during his speech he talked about securities.
例(11)wordy: during the proceeding year, the company was able to accelerate productive operations.
concise: last year, the company was able to accelerate productive operations.
例(10)和例(11)中wordy的句子里in the sense of 可以用during来代替,同为"在...里"的意思;on the question of 可以用about来替代,同为"有关...,关于..."同理,例(11)中wordy的句子里的during the proceeding year也可以用last year来代替。没有改变原来句子要表达的意思,而且显得更加简洁,更加直白,在口语中更加常用。会使得读信人更加容易理解。既然如此,商务信函写作者为什么不用这些简洁、明了、清晰的常用词来代替那些冗长、累赘、空洞的短语呢?
姓名: 胡x 女士 身份证: 430122831106_____ 照片
民族: 汉 目前所在地: 深圳
年龄: 23 岁 户口所在地: 长沙
婚姻状况: 未婚 求职意向及工作经历
人才类型: 全职
应聘职位: 对外贸易、 业务助理、 报关员工作年限: 2 职称: 暂无
求职类型: 全职 可到职日期: 随时
月薪要求: 面议 希望工作地区: 深圳
个人工作经历: 2003/2-2004/7 湖南省长沙望城山塘中学 初三英语教师 尝试外贸2004/8-2005/2 深圳产洋机械有限公司 外贸业务员 继续攻读本科 教育背景
毕业院校: 中南大学
最高学历: 本科 毕业日期: 2006,7
所学专业一: 外语 所学专业二:
受教育培训经历: 2004/9--2006/7 中南大学外语学院 应用英语2000/9--2003/7 湖南黄埔外语专科学院 经贸英语语言能力
外语: 英语 外语水平: 六级
国语水平: 精通 粤语水平: 较差 工作能力及其他专长 英文范文:dear sir/madam:
its my great honor to browse this personal information!
since graduated from hunan huangpu foreign language college in 2003,i had done the teaching for one and half an year,and had worked in foreign trade business.
until in feb,2005,i returned to the south central university for studying more knowledge and confirming objective. during the past two years studing,i had been majoring the application english on the base of trading english,including the advance english(one),advance(two),economy and trade english,busiess english correspondence,selected readings in english and american literatures,chinese and english translation course,interpret and listening,japanese,advance english writing etc.in addtion, i got the undergraduate diploma,flunetly oral english,good conpprehesion reading
better social communication ability! for the time being, i would like to hunt the job that with regard to the trade business or english.i am sure that i should take advantage of my ability and experience to serve for your firm. thanks for your reading! looking forward to your replying! with best regards, salina hu <>
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